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Okay, I like the song, but the words get to me. Therefore, I wrote another version with some not-so-minor tweaks:

Show me things awry
They're getting better all the time
And leading problems to their doom
Is an art that's hard to teach.

Another clever note
Sends all the rats into the mote
And as you step back into line,
A mob jumps to their feet.

Now dance, piper, dance,
Man, they never stood a chance.
And everyone has a clue
How a payment comes to you.

And now you steal away,
Took them out today.
Nice work you did.
You're gonna go far, kid!

With a thousand lines
And a tune sublime,
Charm the sense from the unwise,
Lead them all to their demise.
When you walk away,
Nothing more to play,
See the twinkling in your eyes;
See 'em tredding for their lives

Slowly out of line
And drifting closer in your sights
So play it out, I'm wide awake.
It's a scene about me.
There's something in their way,
And now someone's gotta pay.
And if you can't get what you want,
Then it's all because of me.

Now dance, piper, dance,
Man, I never had a chance.
And everyone has a clue
How a payment comes to you.

And now you'll lead the way,
Drowning the light of day.
Nice work you did.
You're gonna go far, kid!

Trust deceived!

With a thousand lines
And a tune sublime,
Charm the sense from the unwise,
Lead them all to their demise.
When you walk away,
Nothing more to play,
See the twinkling in your eyes;
See 'em tredding for their lives

Now dance, piper, dance,
Man, they never stood a chance.
And everyone has a clue
How a payment comes to you.

So dance, piper, dance.
I never had a chance.
It was really all for you.

With a thousand lines
And a tune sublime,
Charm the sense from the unwise,
Lead them all to their demise.
When you walk away,
Nothing more to play,
See the twinkling in your eyes;
See 'em tredding for their lives

The Catcher in the Rye.
Turned toward your song his youthful eyes.
Charm the sense from the unwise,
Lead them all to their demise.
When you walk away,
Nothing more to play,
See the twinkling in your eyes;
See 'em tredding for their lives




I hope that did not stink as badly as I suspect it did.

Have a nice day.

--Ettir Naya

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:icon4suit:
4Suit Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hey just wanted to say thinks for the Watch+
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EttirNaya Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
No problem. I watch artists whose art I want to see in the future, and I wanted to see yours.
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nuazka Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for the watch~! :iconarigatouplz:
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EttirNaya Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
No problem. I enjoy your stuff.
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nuazka Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, thank you~! :aww:
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MrBastoff Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   Digital Artist
Thank you for watching, EttirNaya.
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EttirNaya Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
No problem. You draw good things.
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MrBastoff Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013   Digital Artist
Glad you think so. ^^
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Dragonfoorm Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks for all the good comments and also for the constructive critic :)
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EttirNaya Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
No problem. It is really the only reason I have an account here--that is, to provide criticism. That, and I liked your work.
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